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Re: 在冰冷雪地长大的心情....
我觉得你的意象过于消极，应该是鸟飞出笼子，或者如果是鱼的话，将会跃入海洋。
我觉得从"生老病死"的虚无中走出来后，将是"海阔凭鱼跃，天高任鸟飞"的感觉。
你的诗内容很鲜明，感觉很敏锐，晕眩、无奈、绝望、芜杂、混乱最后轰然失去自觉。希望之后你体验到的是温暖和重生。
QUOTE Created By 小安 At 2006-4-2
的确16岁的时候烦恼的东西可能是跟现在的不一样. 当初是进了大学了. 但是不是为了爱情也不是为了学校的烦恼. 是感到人生也就确实是'生老病死'.
INSOMNIA[原创]
Haven't slept for days,
Walking around in the moon,
Circling, wondering, no end;
A statue in a busy street
Watching, being watched, never moving.
Like a fish jumping out of its tank
Not surviving even for a moment, suicide.
A fierce bull in the ring,
Struggling, fighting only to be killed.
The night, like water in a blender
Swirling and twisting like a mad hurricane
All whirl pooling right into my head
Dizzy, mindless thoughts
Can't remember the last time I slept. |
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发表于 2006-4-2 23:52
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